Dear Diary – Day 20
It was a cold, miserable day, the grey clouds had blocked out all sunlight and I was still climbing the mountain. I was so thirsty. I knew there was a river waiting for me at the top of the mountain. Suddenly I heard a low growl so I looked down on my right and a hyena stood there on a ledge drooling while staring at me. I panicked and started to climb faster. Suddenly I had accidentally pulled a small rock which caused more big rocks to sandwich me. At this point I knew i couldn’t get out so i took out my diary and started to wright…….. Goodbye.
I really like that story. I like the way you started your story It was a cold miserable day.
Emily I really liked your story and how you describe the rock it was wonderful reading your story I really enjoyed it. If you want to check my blog heres the link: http://kidblog.org/MrMcGintysClass2/author/3ef5fa8c-c4e6-4f23-91e1-ec9f40447bd6/
Hi, my name is Brenda and I really liked your story. You use lots of deceptive words.
Hi Emily, I really liked your story I could see your story in my head.I also liked the part when the hyena stood there drooling.I also liked your choice for this week’s story. And I also hope you can come and check out my blog at http://kidblog.org/MrMcGintysClass3/author/579dfafa-9cc6-485a-879f-6e8a8abe87bc/
Hey Karina thank you so much for commenting on my story!
I will make sure to check out your blog also.
nice story Emily I liked how you goodbye.
I loved your story it was great I loved the hyena part you are a great writer – Hailey
Hi Ashley I am so glad you liked my story!
I will make sure to visit your blog.