The wind was whistling in my ears, the ocean breeze blowing through my hair, I could hear sea-gulls squawking above my head. Suddenly I felt the water change beneath me. Something was lurking in the deep blue sea just under my ship. A two-headed reptilian monster rose from the water. It had scales going all the way down it’s 200 metre long spine. I had two pairs of fangs and was a dark crimson colour. It lunged onto the ship and submerged it under the sea….The wreckage of the ship was found in Inis Oirr, some 150 years later.
Wow what a fantastic piece of work, I loved reading it, well done!!
thank you very much! I’m glad you enjoyed my story:)
Dear, Mary Ellen
I liked your story because I like the breeze on the ocean. If you want to check my stories. I will give you my address of my stories:http://kidblog.org/MrMcGintysClass2/author/20c08bd1-4405-4a2a-8fa0-1cc8099d96a7/
thanks! I will definitely look at your stores:)
I really enjoyed your story I enjoyed it because you made it feel think if I was there on the boat and you used a lot of details. I like to read more of your stories.
And please check out my stories, here’s the link: http://kidblog.org/MrMcGintysClass5/author/d1b07235-822f-4d2f-9b1d-7e346bbe9a93/
Sincerely, Raul
Watsonville, California U.S
thank you for your lovely comment:)
Great story Mary Ellen!! Your use of very vivid vocabulary makes this a fantastic story. Words like squawking and lurking and submerged make this story very professional sounding. Do you enjoy writing? It really seems that way. Keep writing!