Jim walked passed the old ship. It looked just as normal as any other old ship he had ever seen. Rusty, old, weathered, but most of all boring. You see, Jim worked as an “Old Thing Reviewer” (well that’s what he called it anyway). His job was to travel around the world checking to see whether ruins of ships, castles and other buildings were still safe to be there. Then he had to take a picture of them, write a review and give it to his boss. If the ruin was about to fall down, ugly, or in any way dangerous Jim’s boss would order a massive digger to knock it down.
“This one looks fine,” thought Jim. He made a tick on his clipboard, hopped into his car and drove away.
That is a brilliant story Brigid!
This is very good descriptive writing, you have used the prompt very well.
Well done, keep up the good work.
Mrs Mithell (100 wc team)
Thank you so much for the comment. It was very helpful!
Brigid Catherine Caoimhe
What an interesting idea, Brigid! Would you use it as the start of a mystery story? Would you knock down a wreck of a ship or remove it or destroy it? Make sure every one of your 100 words is effective. Good writing, keep it up!
I love your post Brigid, it really sets the scene “rusty, old, and weathered”. The
way he jest drove away in his car. Do you like boats? Do you like old things? Here is my blog http://kidblog.org/MrMcGintysClass2/author/545ed88d-8404-487c-96c3-80c929c9b3d7/
Sincerely, Levi Slay
I really liked how you described the ship and how you used details to support your main idea.
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Jose
From: Watsonville, California U.S.A
I really liked your story.You have excellent descriptive writing. You are very creative and you’re a great writer. Keep writing and god gob!
How’s it like in Ireland? I live in Watsonville which is in the United States. What time do you start school on Ireland?
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