‘You ready?’ I said to my friend he answered with a ‘yes’. We then both looked at each other and jumped. We landed with a big splash. The water was a bit cold, the wet suits that we were wearing helped a lot, we proceeded to swim further and further and deeper and deeper. It was good that we could go so far with the oxygen tank that we wouldn’t have to come up and breathe. Suddenly my friend shouted at me to come, I came and lay there at the bottom of the ocean was a big ship. We immediately came up and told someone that said we would become rich if we let him take care of it. So we did. He got someone to take it out and in the end we did become very, very rich.
Well done Anthony Rory, what a lucky find! I can just imagine how exciting to would be to discover a shipwreck lying at the bottom of the ocean ( I love to snorkel when I’m in the sea and would love to find something myself).You really described the experience well. Next time watch for missing commas.
Thank you,for the tip i’ll look out for the missing commas next time.
I like your story Anthony, I like the part of the big ship. How big was the ship and what type of ship was it.
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Miguel
Lakeview Middle school
Watsonville California, U.S.A
hey, I really liked your story, it was Amazing. I liked the way you started your story when you and your friends jump into the ocean. It was just amazing, I liked it
My name is Jose, I go to Lakeview Middle school. I like to play soccer, and video games,
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Thank you I like to play soccer and video games.
I really liked how you got very very rich in the end of the story and how somebody took care of it. I was also thinking about what do you do for fun and if you are bored what do you do? Also please visit my blog so we can talk. Her is my blog: http://kidblog.org/MrMcGintysClass5/author/3fa1517d-fce5-406e-99b6-feef33250d40/
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